I didn't like this because it seemed too childish. I do appreciate how it's different for you. There just isn't much going on. Maybe if this had been something from when you were a kid, I would liked it. Hey, I've done the same thing here! I guess it's drawn pretty well.
You omitted the black lines. I guess pastel colors do that. It was certainly an experiment for you. It didn't seem to work out that well. You can always learn from anything.