Classic story!
This was really cool to listen to, because it had a really good story for it. How odd that it was for a title submission that you did not even make. The story this sets up is so good it just had to have one, didn't it? The coolest thing was how you consisently keep a creepy tone in your voice all the way through the song. It's simply a great story of the revenge that comes from a little girl. It can be compared to the cartoons made by crookedsixspence.
You emphasis your voice but at the same time you did not seem hammy. You just try to keep a tone that makes sense with the song. It's great to listen to the little beats that go on as you sing. While you have a great singing voice, it shows you went the extra mile by having good use of instruments like that. Thanks for including the lyrics in the author's comments.